This writing unit was realistic fiction. I liked writing this story since I like writing. My title of this story was Raina’s Own Room. When I saw how much words I wrote, I saw that I wrote 2,220 words! (They are words not letters) My story’s character is Raina. She is kind of bossy and mean sometimes, but she still has kind heart. Her character trait happened because of her little sister Lucy. Raina realizes that Lucy is very smart and understands other people’s feelings very well for her age. Even Raina gets bad sometimes, she has a kind heart. I will show you my story……
Raina’s Own Room
Scene 1: Getting Out Of Bed
“Boing!Boing!” Something made Raina move.
‘It’s my annoying little sister,Lucy.’ Thought Raina. She grabbed her blanket and yanked to her side.
“Quit that,Lucy. You know how much I hate when I get disturbed!” Lucy kept on boinging ignoring Raina.
“I don’t care,it’s morning 6am,you should be awake.” Raina yelled back
“I don’t care too,I should be awake at 7am. Not 6am. So get out!” Lucy giggled
“You can’t make me. Let’s play dolly with me.” Raina said “Dolls are for babies.” Then pinched Lucy with all her might. Lucy’s lips trembled, then her eyes filled with water. She shouted
“I didn’t do anything! Bad Raina. I’m telling mom!” Raina mumbled
“Ha,Lucy always cries. This is the best way to make her go out.” She was just glad Lucy was gone. Then,she tried to sleep. But she was already woken by Lucy. She thought ‘If Lucy didn’t woke me,I will be having a wonderful dream. But now,I’m wide awake because of that Lucy. I should have pinched her more harder. No… It would have gotten me into a big trouble. What am I going to do if she tells mom? Maybe say she’s lying or that she had a dream? No…’ Suddenly like answering her she heard her mom yell
“Raina wake up. I know you’re awake. Now.” It wasn’t a pleasant voice.
“Yes mom,I’m coming.” Raina said,not waiting for her mom to say anything. Raina locked the door of hers. She changed her clothes into her favorite ballerina shirt,her favorite skirt,made her hair into a ponytail and went out of her room slowly as she trembled with fear. “Mom won’t be able to prove that I pinched Lucy. I could just say I didn’t. And Lucy will be scared of me because I just pinched her.” Raina took a deep breath and make sured no one was listening to her. “L-U-C-Y stands for Lucy.” Raina repeated to herself. “S-T-U-P-I-D stands for Lucy too.”
Scene 2: Gets Scolded By Her Mom
At the kitchen,her mom asked
“What did you exactly do to your sister,Raina?” Raina lied
“I only said stop waking me up” Her mom said
“I don’t think that is the only thing that you said. I heard you yelling. And Lucy told me that you had pinched her. You’re grounded young lady.” Raina didn’t like the sound of that. So Raina was suddenly afraid
“Okay,I did those things. But anyway,mom,can I please have my own room? Lucy is too messy. Please?” Her mom thought for a minute than she gave her a signal of come. So she went to the dining room and sat down as she felt she had did a bad thing. Then,her mom came to where Raina and Lucy was sitting and gave them their breakfasts while she started talking.
“Lucy,your sister says she wants her own room,what do you think about giving her a room and you getting your own room?” Lucy yelled
“No!No! I like Raina. Don’t let Raina have her own room. I will be scared at night and usually at days too.” Raina rolled her eyes
“But mom,be fair. You should listen to my opinions too. There is no one sharing their rooms with 6 years old little bossy and mean sister.”
“Yes there is”
“No there isn’t”
“Stop Lucy, stop Raina. Now Raina,my answer will be NO. And I don’t need any other words from you.” Her mom said.
“But.. But..” Raina pleaded. Lucy stuck out out her tongue and whispered
“I win! You lose!”
“Get ready for school girls, you’ll be late. It is almost 8am” Her mom said as she went back to her room. “What a disaster from the beginning of the day.”
“You made mommy sick.” Lucy stomped.
“Nope. You made me complain. Now please,out of my way. I will be late.” Raina answered as she walked out of the door. But secretly in her mind,she thought ‘Mom only likes Lucy.’ Then wiped her tears with her hand and crying.
Scene 3: Goes To The Counselor
When Raina was at her classroom having math,she kept on thinking about getting her own room. Suddenly she heard someone say
“……Raina!” And she recognized that voice,it was Miss Folly,her teacher.
“Um,could you say it again, please?” Raina said,feeling embarrassed. Miss Folly sighed
“Please pay more attention to me next time. I said what is 50 times 100?” Raina said
“500. No,I mean 5,000.” Then, she started to think about room again. After 20 more minutes,the bell rang “RIING!” and it was time for recess. When she was about to get to recess,Miss Folly called
“Raina,could you come here please?” Raina came and Miss Folly said “You’ve been acting weird today. You were staring at the window and you never raised your hands to answer any questions. Usually,you’re always looking at me,always answering at least 10 questions in each class. What’s wrong with you,Raina? Maybe you should go to the counselor’s office.” Raina thought for a second. She did thought counselors can help solve this problem. So she nodded. Then she walked to the counselor’s office and knocked. After few seconds,a woman came up to her.
“Hi” She said to Raina. “I’m Mrs.Adam. How about you? You look very gorgeous! Come in!” Mrs.Adam looked like she was 30. Raina said as she was coming in
“My name is Raina. I think you might give me some helps for my problem. I have a six years old sister. I have to share my rooms with her. I asked my mom for my own room. But mom said no. I know this is not a serious problem but can you help me?” Mrs.Adam smiled
“Of course,so I think I know why. Did you tell your mom why? Were you nice to your sister? Did you say things in nice ways?” Raina said
“All no,Mrs.Adam.” Mrs.Adam suggested
“So,maybe you should try to say your ideas more specifically. And be more nice.” Raina liked that idea even though she it was hard for her.
“Yeah, thanks Mrs.Adam.” Mrs.Adam just smiled to her saying “Raina,good luck!”
Scene 4: Gets An Idea By Her Friends
At her home,Raina had invited her friends to come and play. She was so embarrassed with her little sister that she locked Lucy to her room.
“Don’t ruin my play date.” She told Lucy. Then told her friends she didn’t have any siblings. Raina didn’t let her friends go to her bedroom,because Lucy was there. Instead,she let them go to their parents room. She was looking around making sure no one went in the bedroom. Luckily,her friends liked the room because her parents had an “interesting” room. Her parents liked to decorate their rooms almost every week! Raina thought it was weird before,but now,she thanked her parents. She was satisfied. In her parents room,there were rhombus shaped beds and triangle shaped desks. It looked very interesting. But few minutes later,her friends were bored.
“Can you show us your room,Raina? You have 2 rooms, right? I saw your studying room,but how about your bedroom? Where do you sleep?”
“Uhm,I…I… I’m sorry. I lied to you guys. I do have a little sister. And I have to share rooms with her. I asked mom for my own room. But she won’t budge. And I talked to the counselor,and I don’t know if I’ll do that!” Raina bursted out. Then,she told what happened from beginning to end. She didn’t thought they will believe her. One of her friends said “You should do what Mrs.Adam told you to do. Also,you can prove that you’re old enough.” Raina’s face began to smile. It wasn’t a normal one. It was more brighter than the usual one.
“Thanks guys! I don’t know what to do with out you!” After one hour,her friends were gone. She let her sister out of the room and went to her desk. She wrote something and drew something. It looked very perfect. She drew and wrote. And drew and wrote. Finally it was done. She had planned a marvelous plan to action.
Scene 5: Her Marvelous Plan
Raina ran as fast as she can to her mom.
“NO RUNNING IN THE HOUSE RAINA!” Her mom yelled. “Sorry,mom. But could you please listen to me just for 5 minutes?” Raina pleaded. Her mom was very surprised that she wasn’t inpatient as usual. Raina’s mom said
“Sure. Come to the kitchen.” When Raina walked slowly to the kitchen,her mom grinned to her.
“Mom,I’m sorry for the trouble I made this morning. So,I’m saying slowly again. May I ask you for my own room? I am 10 as you know. No one in my grade is sharing their rooms with their siblings. I also need my privacy and it’s hard to study when Lucy is playing,yelling all around. Also, Lucy interrupts when I’m on the phone,when I have play dates. Please? And I’ll take care of Lucy to prove I’m old enough and responsible enough.” Her mom said
“Well…. Okay. So then,could you babysit Lucy later at 6 till 9? Because I have to go to the mall to buy few things. Lucy’s usual babysitter is sick so she’s not able to come. If Lucy tells me you did a good job,I’ll let you have your own room. But no torturing Lucy and making her like last time. If you do,you’ll never have your own room. Got it? Yes or no?” Raina thought about last time she had tortured Lucy by making her say that Raina was at home even though she wasn’t and it didn’t work. She gulped
“I..I.. will try my best. I am not sure but I’ll try.” Her mom snapped
“You have to be positive.” Raina said
“I will.” So then,her mom called
“Lucy, Raina is going to babysit you. Listen to her and behave your self.” Lucy said
“I’m a good girl not a bad girl like Raina.” Her mom said “Lucy,that’s not a nice thing to say.” Lucy sighed “Okay,you’re kind of nice too,Raina.”
‘My plan is working.’ Raina smiled. But it was only one of her plans. She had to make sure her other plans went smoothly.
Scene 6: Her Plan Not As She Wanted
When her mom left after dinner,Raina said in a kind voice “What do you want to do for two hours?” Lucy said thinking “Well,let’s explore the house like we did when you were 8 and I was 3.” Raina thought
‘Lucy is not so bad after all!’ Raina then took Lucy outside in the backyard. They went around and around the house when Lucy yelled
“Raina!” Raina ran to her. Lucy suddenly cried “I’m always being not nice to you. I’m always saying or doing something very bad but I don’t mean it. I tried to say this since this morning but I couldn’t. Don’t think it’s because of you.” Raina looked at Lucy very carefully not believing her. But Lucy looked very innocent. At the same time,they said “Sorry for being mean.” Raina told Lucy “I feel very sorry. I’m 5 years old older than you but you say things that sound older.” Lucy then said
“Let’s go inside Raina,I don’t want to play. I want to sleep.” So they went inside and Raina tucked Lucy in bed. But she saw that Lucy wasn’t sleeping. So Raina just acted like she thought Lucy was asleep and went out. She thought
‘This lately,I was very stupid. I should have remembered that time when Lucy didn’t slept when I was sick. And I never did good things for her. Maybe mom was right. I’m not responsible enough.’ When her mom came back,Raina ran to her mom. Lucy did too since she was awake.
“Lucy,it’s your sleeping time! Go back to sleep.” Her mom said to Lucy.
“Just wait mommy,I think Raina did a good job taking care of me. I think you should give her,her own room.” Lucy said. “Are you sure,Lucy?” Her mom asked surprised. Lucy nodded. Raina said weakly
“I don’t think so. I’m not responsible enough.” Her mom was very surprised but she was happy
“Raina,you are responsible.” Raina asked
“Really? I’m responsible?” They nodded. Lucy said
“Let’s get started right now!” Her mom and Raina said at the same time laughing
“Do you really want to be working at night 10pm?!” That night,Raina couldn’t go to sleep. So silently,she woke up. She thought ‘What will it be feel like to have my own room?’ Her chest pounded like a thunder. ‘Like mom and Lucy said,maybe I old enough. Like my changed personality. I was very unpleasant at first but now I’m not!’ Raina was very proud of herself.
This is my story arc.
This is my character.