It’s so cool that you were able to go early and then help out when everyone else arrived. I enjoyed the details you provided to describe your experience…I shivered thinking about taking a shower of ice cubes! Sounds like a great week and a great opportunity!
I really liked how you dug deep into the important parts of your story. I also liked how you expressed your feelings and made the story funny. Another thing I really liked was how added smilies like ‘the shower felt like ice cubes’. Maybe you could improve on talking about the campus more since the title is called camp. But overall, I really liked the story
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